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Surprise ‘Em Mar 10

Surprise!

"That's good screenwriting!"

The Wow Factor

Want to know a surefire way to impress someone reading your script? Surprise them!

That doesn’t mean coming up with a twist ending. That means ensuring there are surprises in every scene. Yes, EVERY scene.

Surprises can take on many forms:

  • Actions that contradict a character’s intent
  • Dialogue that contradicts a character’s actions
  • Humorous exploits
  • Payoffs to things setup earlier in the script
  • Snappy comebacks
  • Shocking imagery
  • Reveals that change what we thought we were looking at
  • Beginning a scene in an unexpected way
  • Ending a scene in an unexpected way
  • New complications
  • Thought provoking predicaments
  • Character mishaps
  • Clichés turned on their ear

… and the list goes on and on.

Sometimes we get wrapped up in the function of a scene (e.g. “I just need my characters to fight so one will leave”). The result? It falls flat.

In your spec script there should be no such thing as a “standard scene.” Throw in a surprise (or two or three) in every scene and you’ll dramatically improve both your story and your chances of receiving a “recommend” rating.

What the…?

For some surprising inspiration, here are two bizarre videos that take you in entirely unexpected directions.

An important (and hilarious) announcement from Ronald Reagan… In Spanish of course. Keep watching this one, it’s worth it.

 

“First these giant teddy bears started crossing the road… and then things got weird.”

Guest Post at ScriptXRay Mar 10

Guest Post at ScriptXRayI’ve been a big fan of the web site ScriptXRay for a long time. So I was very excited by the opportunity to contribute today’s guest post for their site, on the subject of demystifying story structure.

Here’s an excerpt:

Hallowed or Hackneyed?

When it comes to mainstream Hollywood story structure, there tends to be two schools of thought.

1) Hallowed — “There is a mystical reason we humans respond to the same basic story told over and over again.”

2) Hackneyed — “Movies have become far too formulaic, with their clichéd heroes journeys and fill-in-the-blanks beat sheets.”

Both are slightly off.

Please read the rest of this article at ScriptXRay.com and let me know what you think!

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Oscar Themed Links Mar 07

Hurt Locker (Tavis Coburn)In anticipation of the 82nd Academy Awards celebration tonight, I’ve collected a few cool Oscar themed links:

* Tavis Coburn, of The Dutch Uncle Agency, created vintage style movie posters for all the British Academy Film Awards nominees (which are also up for Oscars).

* All of the Oscar nominated Animated Shorts are online. In my opinion, Logorama gets top marks for a highly original, hilarious, and sometimes shocking, tale. This movie may result in a lifetime of trademark infringement lawsuits for the creator, but that’s a small price to pay for an Academy Award nomination right?

Listed according to my ranking:

1) “Logorama” Nicolas Schmerkin (Part 2 here)
2) “A Matter of Loaf and Death” Nick Park
3) “Granny O’Grimm’s Sleeping Beauty” Nicky Phelan and Darragh O’Connell
4) “French Roast” Fabrice O. Joubert
5) “The Lady and the Reaper (La Dama y la Muerte)” Javier Recio Gracia

* Sandra Bullock (nominated for a Best Actress Oscar) brings humor and perspective to the Razzies by showing up to accept her award for Worst Actress.

* There were two trilogies in which all three films were nominated for Best Picture. Can you name them? Here are 10 of the “Best Facts about the Best Pictures.”

Montage Format – Part 2 Mar 03

Montage Pt 2Recap

Jim Sarantinos had asked: “Can you tell me how to format montage sequences?”

In Part 1 of this article, I started off my response by listing the order of operations I usually follow for exploring any type of script formatting issue:

1. Search JohnAugust.com for tips
2. Refer to Christopher Riley’s book, The Hollywood Standard
3. Refer to David Trottier’s book, The Screenwriter’s Bible
4. Consult my library of scripts and Scott Myers’
    GoIntoTheStory.com
5. Use what makes sense to me. Throw out the rest.

We covered number 1 last time, with John August’s recommendation for formatting single-location montages.

But what if you have multiple locations, or different times (i.e. DAY and NIGHT)?

Formatting Guides

There are two industry-standard script formatting guides that address both these scenarios quite nicely.

The first is Christopher Riley’s, The Hollywood Standard. After all, it’s the book that finally convinced John August (at least for the time being) that he didn’t need to write about screenwriting format any longer.

The second is David Trottier’s, The Screenwriter’s Bible. It’s a little older, but also provides numerous examples to help you understand the points being made.

MONTAGE vs. SERIES OF SHOTS

A quick word about these two devices. Both guides will tell you that MONTAGE and SERIES OF SHOTS can be used interchangeably, however MONTAGE is much more commonly used.

In general, a MONTAGE is used for those longer sequences that you typically see set to music, and usually focuses on a theme or concept (e.g. JACK AND DIANE ENJOY THE BEACH).

A SERIES OF SHOTS is typically comprised of quick, short shots to rapidly convey a story segment (e.g. TIMMY SNEAKS OUTSIDE). So if it’s helpful, think MONTAGE (MUSIC) / SERIES OF SHOTS (SHORT STORY). And when in doubt, just use MONTAGE.

But honestly, either way, no one’s likely to throw your script out just because you used MONTAGE instead of SERIES OF SHOTS or vice versa. While some purists may disagree, there are no hard and fast, right and wrong rules here.

FORMATTING EXAMPLES

Remember, when considering all of these examples, we need to heed John August’s words:

My advice is to pick the simplest version that gets the point across. You may find that you’re using two or three different formats in a single script, depending on the needs of each sequence.1

So I’ll try to move from basic to more complex…

Example 1: Basic

MONTAGE

Jack and Diane stroll arm-in-arm along the sidewalk.  They see a contorted mannequin, its head faces the wrong way.  Diane winces.  Jack laughs.

They share a plate of spaghetti at a patio restaurant.  Diane dangles a single noodle from her lips, wants Jack to play along.  He grabs the other end of the noodle in his mouth.  Slurps it up in one quick motion.  Cheers like he’s just scored a touchdown.

An old romantic film plays at a theater.  Diane rolls her eyes at the screen.  Turns to Jack.  He stares, riveted, teary eyed.  She smiles.

END MONTAGE

Notes:

1) If the montage is short enough (as above), you can simply use a new scene heading to denote that it has ended (instead of END MONTAGE).

If you feel like adding a little descriptor of what the montage is all about, that’s common/acceptable as well. For example, the above montage header I could have written something like: “MONTAGE – JACK AND DIANE’S FIRST DATE”

Example 2: Indented

Here, double lines are used.

MONTAGE

-- Jack and Diane stroll arm-in-arm along the sidewalk.  They see a contorted mannequin, its head faces the wrong way.  Diane winces.  Jack laughs.

-- They share a plate of spaghetti at a patio restaurant.  Diane dangles a single noodle from her lips, wants Jack to play along.  He grabs the other end of the noodle in his mouth.  Slurps it up in one quick motion.  Cheers like he’s just scored a touchdown.

-- An old romantic film plays at a theater.  Diane rolls her eyes at the screen.  Turns to Jack.  He stares, riveted, teary eyed.  She smiles.

You can also have some fun with this method and make sure the secondary lines match the indent of the first line:

MONTAGE
-- Jack and Diane stroll arm-in-arm along the sidewalk.  They see a
   contorted mannequin, its head faces the wrong way.  Diane winces.
   Jack laughs.
-- They share a plate of spaghetti at a patio restaurant.  Diane dangles
   a single noodle from her lips, wants Jack to play along.  He grabs the
   other end of the noodle in his mouth.  Slurps it up in one quick motion. 
   Cheers like he's just scored a touchdown.
-- An old romantic film plays at a theater.  Diane rolls her eyes at the
   screen.  Turns to Jack.  He stares, riveted, teary eyed.  She smiles.

Example 3: Scene Headings

Some production companies and studios like you to list a location for each shot…

MONTAGE

-- Sidewalk – Jack and Diane stroll arm-in-arm .  They see a contorted mannequin, its head faces the wrong way.  Diane winces.  Jack laughs.

-- Patio restaurant – They share a plate of spaghetti. Diane dangles a single noodle from her lips, wants Jack to play along.  He grabs the other end of the noodle in his mouth.  Slurps it up in one quick motion.  Cheers like he’s just scored a touchdown.

-- Old theater – Diane rolls her eyes at the romance on screen.  Turns to Jack.  He stares, riveted, teary eyed.  She smiles.

See how I had to change up the descriptions a little to avoid the redundancy of the location?

If you’re already adding in locations, and you want to be sure to indicate the shift in times, you could also do the following:

MONTAGE

-- EXT. SIDEWALK – DAY -- Jack and Diane stroll arm-in-arm.  They see a contorted mannequin, its head faces the wrong way.  Diane winces.  Jack laughs.

-- EXT. PATIO RESTAURANT – NIGHT -- They share a plate of spaghetti. Diane dangles a single noodle from her lips, wants Jack to play along.  He grabs the other end of the noodle in his mouth.  Slurps it up in one quick motion.  Cheers like he’s just scored a touchdown.

-- EXT. OLD THEATER – NIGHT -- Diane rolls her eyes at the romance on screen.  Turns to Jack.  He stares, riveted, teary eyed.  She smiles.

END MONTAGE

Again, here I changed things slightly, adding a double dash after the more official scene heading. I also used the END MONTAGE just to avoid any confusion as to where the montage ended (because full scene headings were used inside the montage).

Example 4: Series of Shots

SERIES OF SHOTS – TIMMY SNEAKS OUT

Timmy’s eyes open.  He yanks his bed covers off, already dressed with sweats and shoes.

Gentle footsteps, as he makes his way down the hallway.

He searches the fridge.  Stuffs his face with cookies.  Looks around.

At the front door.  He pulls on a woolen facemask.  Looks like a midget bank robber.

He tiptoes outside.  Turns back to look at the house.  Trips, CRASHES over two bags filled with CANS.

All the lights in the house turn on. His mom peaks her head out the window.

Remember, a SERIES OF SHOTS typically tells a short contained story segment. As with MONTAGE I could have left off the “TIMMY SNEAKS OUT” part. It just depends on the flavor of your script and if you want to use the heading option for clarity.

An alternate method is to use alphabetized letters to delineate the shots:

SERIES OF SHOTS - TIMMY SNEAKS OUT
A) Timmy's eyes open.  He yanks his bed covers off, already dressed
   with sweats and shoes.
B) Gentle footsteps, as he makes his way down the hallway.
C) He searches the fridge.  Stuffs his face with cookies.  Looks around.
D) At the front door.  He pulls on a woolen facemask.  Looks like a midget
   bank robber.
E) He tiptoes outside.  Turns back to look at the house.  Trips, CRASHES
   over two bags filled with CANS.
F) All the lights in the house turn on.  His mom peaks her head
   out the window.

Of course, you could also call it a MONTAGE and use the lettered approach as well.

MONTAGE - THE FIRST DATE
A) EXT. SIDEWALK - DAY

   Jack and Diane stroll arm-in-arm.  They see a contorted mannequin,
   its head faces the wrong way.  Diane winces.  Jack laughs.
B) EXT. PATIO RESTAURANT - NIGHT

   They share a plate of spaghetti. Diane dangles a single noodle
   from her lips, wants Jack to play along.  He grabs the other
   end of the noodle in his mouth.  Slurps it up in one quick
   motion.  Cheers like he's just scored a touchdown.
C) EXT. OLD THEATER - NIGHT

   Diane rolls her eyes at the romance on screen.  Turns to Jack.
   He stares, riveted, teary eyed.  She smiles.

And that’s enough for montages for another day! Just save this series so you’ll have it to refer to when you need it.

In the conclusion of this thrilling three part saga, we’ll consult my script library and check out Scott Myers’ web site gointothestory.com.

We will need it for handling some tricky montages that include dialogue and span multiple days or years. There will also be some formatting surprises from well known montages used in films.

Until next time… I’ll leave you with the video that taught me everything I know about montages. :)

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Miscast Classic Films Mar 02

Let’s all breathe a collective: “Phew!”

Dan Meth peeks behind the showbiz curtain to bring you the Hollywood that could have been. Some of cinema’s greatest film roles, as played by some of [the] actors initially considered for them.

 

Video Link via Neatorama