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Adam Levenberg – Script Consultant Jul 30

Since I’ve been on hiatus from script consulting, I’m often asked if I could recommend other consultants. I’m happy to add Adam Levenberg — former development executive and author of The Starter Screenplay: An Executive’s Perspective on Screenwriting — to the list.

I enjoyed Adam’s book and recently tried out his consulting service for my latest screenplay. It was an eye-opening experience.

My writing is strong enough that it can sometimes cause readers to overlook inherent deficits that may exist in the script. Not Adam — he homes in on those problem areas like a laser-guided missile.

The funny thing about screenwriting is that it takes years of practice before the lessons you’ve learned from university, books, seminars, etc. get transferred onto the page. You’ll make mistakes where you’ll say to yourself, “Geez, I knew that! What was I thinking?” The longer you write, the less this will happen. But in the meantime, you need someone like Adam to point those mistakes out to you. He’ll dig deep into your script and root them out.

And when I say dig deep, I mean it. He doesn’t just give your script the once-over. He spends a lot of time both reading the script and going over the issues with you. Part of his service is a comprehensive phone conversation, that might last several hours. He also welcomes extensive follow-up with his clients.

Obviously this service isn’t cheap, but it’s worth it . He’s not only a guy who can help make your script better, he’s a guy who can put you in touch with agents and managers if your script impresses him. That alone makes his service a cut above — especially for the more advanced writers out there.

For more information on Adam and his services, check out his website — HireAHollywoodExec.com. He encourages writers, who are considering his services, to contact him in advance so he can make sure to meet or exceed their expectations.

5 Things to Consider When Incorporating Feedback Nov 18

I have a few friends who have a hard time knowing what to do with the feedback they receive on their scripts. So for all you similar screenwriters out there, this post’s for you.

(Note: This post has little to do with the development phase where you’re incorporating notes from executives. It deals with the rewriting phase of your script where the only people who have seen it are friends, family, peers, script consultants, etc.)

5 Things to Consider When Incorporating Feedback

Script Feedback1. Does it resonate with you?

If the note you receive on your script doesn’t make sense to you, you should never incorporate it. There has to be some recognition of its inherent validity for it to be considered. Never follow a note blindly, no matter who’s giving it to you.

2. Is everyone saying the same thing?

While it’s important to stay true to your artistic vision, ultimately you want a script that appeals to your audience. If you consistently get the same note back from your respected readers, you need to seriously consider incorporating it.

3. Does it hint at an underlying or alternate problem?

Suppose you’re absolutely sure that some story beat needs to stay in your script, yet your readers keep flagging it. It’s entirely possible that the setup to the beat, or some other aspect of the scene or script needs tweaking. Part of your job is to read between the lines of what people are saying.

4. Are you resistant to a suggestion because of the work involved in correcting it?

Sometimes we’ll bristle at a suggestion, and immediately think, “No frikken way!” Usually that happens when the suggestion involves a major change.

When you receive such a note, take a deep breath, let the feedback wash over you for a couple of days, then try to evaluate it as dispassionately and honestly as you can. If you decide the feedback is valid, it might take you a few extra weeks, even months, to rewrite your script, but that’s a much better alternative than hoping no one else will see the problem… because I promise you they will. You’ve come this far, you might as well give your script the best chance of selling.

5. Who’s giving you the note?

If you’ve just written a raunchy teenage comedy and your grandma thinks some of the lines are too offensive… you should probably take that with a grain of salt.

But that’s an easy call. Often you’ll have peers who are accomplished in one particular genre, but may not have expertise in your genre. Or maybe you’ve given them harsh criticism on their last script and they’ve been itching for some payback.

On the other side of things, if someone who’s been around the block for a number of years tells you something that no one else has told you, it’s possible they’re bang on with their feedback and they’ve seen something that more casual readers have missed.

Either way, make sure you run the feedback through all five of these litmus tests before you start incorporating it. And remember, no one knows your story better than you do.

How do you process feedback?


Visionaries or Rip-off Artists? (Or Both?) Oct 08

When we think of people like James Cameron, Darren Aronofsky, the Wachowski brothers, Tarantino… many words come to mind: visionaries, geniuses, mavericks, thieves — wait, what?

Thieves?

The experts at CRACKED.com have come up with another excellent film-related article that showcases “7 Classic Movies You Didn’t Know Were Rip-Offs.”

I’m all for paying homage to classic movies, or using concepts from old shows or books as jumping off points to begin an original story, but did these movies take it too far?

CRACKED.com’s insightful and thought-provoking article provides a historical perspective, videos, and side-by-side screen captures, where applicable, of seven such instances.

Here are few images comparing Black Swan to a Japanese animated film called Perfect Blue, about:

… a pop singer instead of a ballet dancer, but other than that, Black Swan could pass for its American remake. In both movies, the young, innocent protagonist has just moved on to a more demanding job (dramatic actress/lead dancer), and the pressure turns her apeshit. She gets chased by a “double” who may or may not be the product of her imagination, and at one point becomes convinced that she killed someone.

Cracked - Black Swan Comparison

Cracked - Black Swan Comparison

Cracked - Black Swan Comparison

Yes, the pictures also come to life and taunt her in Perfect Blue.

Here’s the full list of movies that they scrutinize:

#7. Pirates of the Caribbean Is Suspiciously Similar to the Game The Secret of Monkey Island

#6. The Matrix Was a Comic Book

#5. Black Swan Was a Japanese Cartoon

#4. J.J. Abrams’ Star Trek Is Really Star Wars

#3. Wild Wild West Was an Episode of Batman: The Animated Series

#2. Terminator Was a Bunch of Harlan Ellison Sci-Fi Stories

#1. Reservoir Dogs Was a Film From Hong Kong

It’s worth pointing out that a few key scenes and ideas does not a movie make. All of these movies (with perhaps the exception of Wild Wild West) feature brilliant story elements, dialogue and cinematic innovation that did not appear in the sources that are being cited. The execution of an idea is a thing unto itself. That’s why you can’t copyright a concept.

But — if the execution is virtually identical, that’s another matter… Seriously, check out the Reservoir Dogs section and tell me that wasn’t a flagrant rip-off something more than an homage.

What’s your take? Does the knowledge that these filmmaking icons borrowed (stole) key elements from these previous sources cause you to look at them in a different light?

Read the full article at CRACKED.com.

$59 Script Notes Jul 29

$59 Dollar Script NotesI’m always telling my clients to streamline things, so I followed my own advice and whittled down my script services to one…

$59 Script Notes!

Basically, I took my most popular offerings and bundled them at my lowest price. That may not make me a smart businessman, but I’m sure you guys will love it.

For what you get, I honestly believe it’s the cheapest and best deal on the web. If you’ve never used my script reading service before, please give it a try while this price lasts.

Get off the island Nov 02

Get off the island!Writing is a very solitary craft. Even if you have a writing partner, most of your time will still be spent isolated on an island of your thoughts, staring at a computer screen, tapping at your keyboard, away from people and distractions.

That’s all well and good, but it’s also very important to get off the island, and get feedback on your script. The earlier the better. After all, you may be scriptwrecked and not even know it!

One of the best ways to get free feedback is to join one of the many screenwriters’ groups out there. Having a group of fellow screenwriters discuss the elements of your script, at its various phases (from logline to finished screenplay), can pay huge dividends. A good group will:

  • give you an outlet to bounce around ideas
  • offer you encouragement
  • discuss ways to improve your scenes
  • help you with structure or story problems you’re encountering
  • catch mistakes you would otherwise have missed
  • provide nuggets of insight and advice

So get off that island and get some quality feedback on your screenplay! Sometimes getting critiqued is difficult, but it’s far better than the alternative — sending your script out before it’s ready.

To find a group near you, go to Google and type: “screenwriters group [your city name]”

Two heads are always better than one. More than that even better, unless your name is Cerberus.

“I have never met a man so ignorant that I couldn’t learn something from him.” – Galileo Galilei

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