Every day this week I’ll be posting a new article on common mistakes screenwriters make.
Today’s topic is adverbs — you know, those flowery words that usually end in “ly.” Words like: quickly, haphazardly, vastly, very, annoyingly… etc. They describe verbs or adjectives. These words are great if you’re writing a novel, but they can brand you as an amateur if you use them extensively in your scene description. (In the last script I wrote, I didn’t use a single one)
“But why?” you ask eagerly. “I genuinely love adverbs. They give me that wonderfully fuzzy feeling.”
It’s simple. It’s often the mark of a lazy screenwriter. Our job is to write only what you can see and hear, in a succinct, clever and accurate way. That requires coming up with the perfect verb or adjective to describe the scene. And usually that’s enough.
The Grinch moves stealthily across the floor like a frighteningly evil cat.
You could use:
The Grinch creeps across the floor like a demonic cat.
The Grinch slinks across the floor like a possessed cat.
You get the idea. Get rid of the adverbs if you can and use better verbs and adjectives. I could have just eliminated “stealthily” and kept “moves,” but “moves” is too simple of a verb. We’ll talk more about that tomorrow.
Sometimes, though, you can simply eliminate the adverb and still achieve the same effect. In a script I read recently, the writer had used something like, “… grossly gnarled hand.” If a hand is gnarled, the “grossly” part is redundant. After all, I’ve never seen a beautifully gnarled hand.
Remember, the no-adverb rule only applies to scene description. Go nuts in dialogue, etc. if it feels authentic.